Sentence Correction
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Q.

The primary drama of Homer's famed Iliad revolves around anger amongst the renowned and wrathful warrior Achilles and Agamemnon, the King of Mycenae and the leader of Achaean army

 A.

revolves around anger amongst the renowned and wrathful warrior Achilles and Agamemnon, the King of Mycenae and the leader of Achaean army

 B.

revolve in the anger between the renowned and wrathful warrior Achilles and the King of Mycenae and the leader of the Achaean army Agamemnon

 C.

revolves around the anger between Achilles, a renowned and wrathful warrior, and Agamemnon, king of Mycenae and the leader of the Achaean army

 D.

revolves in the anger between Achilles, a renowned and wrathful warrior, and Agamemnon, king of Mycenae and the leader of the Achaean army

 E.

revolve around Achilles, a renowned and wrathful warrior, and his anger toward Agamemnon, king of Mycenae and the leader of the Achaean army

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Solution:
Option(C) is correct

There are two main problems with the original sentence.

(1) The phrase the anger amongst is not idiomatically correct and is inaccurate as the anger is between the two characters. The idiom between x and y should be used.

(2) The descriptions of the two men should be in parallel form within the idiom (e.g. between x, description of x, and y, description of y; or between {description of x} x and {description y} y).

For example: anger between Achilles, a renowned and wrathful warrior, and Agamemnon, king of Mycenae and the leader of the Achaean army

A. the phrase anger amongst...Achilles and the King of Mycenae is not idiomatically correct and should be anger between x and y; The descriptions of the two men should be in parallel form within the idiom

B. the subject (the primary drama, which is singular) does not agree with the verb (revolve, which is plural); the phrase the drama...revolve[s] in the anger is awkward

C. the correct idiom (between x and y) is used; the descriptions of the two men are in parallel form within the idiom

D. the phrase x revolves in y (i.e., drama...revolves in the anger) is not idiomatically correct and should be replaced by the phrase x revolved around y (i.e., drama...revolves around the anger)

E. the subject (the primary drama, which is singular) does not agree with the verb (revolve, which is plural; this phrase distorts the meaning of the original sentence, falsely giving the impression that the drama revolved around Achilles ... and his anger instead of giving the correct impression that the drama revolved around the anger between Achilles...and Agamemnon)


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