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Recent elections in a relatively young and historically unstable country in East Africa saw record numbers of voters, the peaceful rejection of an incumbent administration, the unprecedented access of media, campaigning marked by civility, and a renewing of nationalism.

 A.

numbers of voters, the peaceful rejection of an incumbent administration, the unprecedented access of media, campaigning marked by civility, and a renewing of nationalism

 B.

voter turnout, the peaceful rejection of an incumbent administration, unprecedented media access, campaigning marked by civility, and a renewing of nationalism

 C.

voter turnout, the rejection of an incumbent administration in a peaceful manner, the unprecedented access of media, campaigns marked by civility, and renewed nationalism

 D.

numbers of voters, the peaceful rejection of an incumbent administration, unprecedented media access, campaigns marked by civility, and renewed nationalism

 E.

voter turnout, the peaceful rejection of an incumbent administration, unprecedented media access, campaigns marked by civility, and renewed nationalism

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Solution:
Option(E) is correct

All the traits or characteristics of the election should be parallel (nouns in this case). In other words, the sentence should read: Recent elections ... saw {noun}, {noun}, {noun}, {noun}, and {noun}.

In the current sentence, campaigning marked by civility is a participle and not a noun. This phase can be a noun: campaigns marked by civility.
The wordy phrase a renewing of nationalism can be shortened to renewed nationalism.
The wordy phrase number of votes can be shortened to voter turnout.

A. all traits of the election are not parallel (campaigning marked by civility is not a noun); a renewing of nationalism is not concise; number of votes is not concise

B. all traits of the election are not parallel (campaigning marked by civility is not a noun); a renewing of nationalism is not concise;

C. the wordy phrase the unprecedented access of media can be shortened tounprecedented media access; the wordy phrase the rejection of an incumbent administration in a peaceful manner can be shortened to the peaceful rejection of an incumbent administration

D. numbers of is grammatically wrong and can be corrected and shortened by the word turnout

E. the sentence is concise; all traits or characteristics of the election are parallel


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